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Дайте Нефть Из Баку Yay!
We're now shifting from wise aphorisms to more prosaic lines. Something easy to keep the rounds coming:
"Ogni legittimo, buon astigiano
esce dall'utero col fiasco in mano.
Comincia a bere dal dì che nasce,
di vino imporpora le prime fasce."
We're now shifting from wise aphorisms to more prosaic lines. Something easy to keep the rounds coming:
"Ogni legittimo, buon astigiano
esce dall'utero col fiasco in mano.
Comincia a bere dal dì che nasce,
di vino imporpora le prime fasce."
Sarah Karoline Here goes...
Every lawful, happy inhabitant of Asti comes out of the uterus with *a flask in his hand.
(* I'd change "col" to "with a" in English)
He starts to drink from the day of his birth, wine reddening his first *swaddling clothes/crib.
Every lawful, happy inhabitant of Asti comes out of the uterus with *a flask in his hand.
(* I'd change "col" to "with a" in English)
He starts to drink from the day of his birth, wine reddening his first *swaddling clothes/crib.
Дайте Нефть Из Баку And here's the correction. 
Every lawful, [happy] (inhabitant of Asti) comes out of the uterus with a (flask) in (his) hand.
He starts to drink from the day of (his) birth, [...] wine reddening (his) first (swaddling clothes).
[] = wrong term/ a word missing
() = a better term could be used, even by means of a paraphrase.
Every lawful, [happy] (inhabitant of Asti) comes out of the uterus with a (flask) in (his) hand.
He starts to drink from the day of (his) birth, [...] wine reddening (his) first (swaddling clothes).
[] = wrong term/ a word missing
() = a better term could be used, even by means of a paraphrase.
Sarah Karoline Draft 2.
Every lawful, *true Astigiano comes out of the uterus with a *bottle in * hand.
He starts to drink a bottle of wine from *the day of birth, reddening *the first *swathes / bandages.
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I may have been a little creative there....!
Every lawful, *true Astigiano comes out of the uterus with a *bottle in * hand.
He starts to drink a bottle of wine from *the day of birth, reddening *the first *swathes / bandages.
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I may have been a little creative there....!
Дайте Нефть Из Баку Brad Wilson: completely forgot about that. I know the first stanzas by heart, so I didn't think about checking first. "Bevere" is the old-fashioned form of "bere", so it's not a big deal anyway.
Sarah: yes, a wee bit creative. The word order was fine in your previous draft, now it's kind of messed up.
General corrections:
Buon = good --> yes.
Fasce = swaddling bands --> yes. Simply "bands" is fine.
Missing word = with --> yes.
Fiasco/flask/bottle --> I thought "flask" only referred to metal flasks, but I was wrong. Flask is fine.
Astigiano --> it's fine, I suppose. I was thinking about "Astesan", which doesn't even exist but it's kind of an English adaptation from the old fashioned "astesano/astense".
Sarah: yes, a wee bit creative. The word order was fine in your previous draft, now it's kind of messed up.
General corrections:
Buon = good --> yes.
Fasce = swaddling bands --> yes. Simply "bands" is fine.
Missing word = with --> yes.
Fiasco/flask/bottle --> I thought "flask" only referred to metal flasks, but I was wrong. Flask is fine.
Astigiano --> it's fine, I suppose. I was thinking about "Astesan", which doesn't even exist but it's kind of an English adaptation from the old fashioned "astesano/astense".
Sarah Karoline Hopefully this isn't messy anymore!
Every lawful, good Astesan comes out of the uterus with a flask in hand.
(To me "flask" is something you pour hot tea or coffee into and the flask keeps it hot, but a "hip flask" is for alcohol.)
He starts to drink from the day of birth, (of) wine reddening his first *swaddling bands.
(To me "bands" sounds like the child is mummified
Keeps it quiet, so a good idea!)
Every lawful, good Astesan comes out of the uterus with a flask in hand.
(To me "flask" is something you pour hot tea or coffee into and the flask keeps it hot, but a "hip flask" is for alcohol.)
He starts to drink from the day of birth, (of) wine reddening his first *swaddling bands.
(To me "bands" sounds like the child is mummified
Keeps it quiet, so a good idea!)
Brad Wilson Here is the entire poem (no translation) from Poesie di Francesco Morelli (1895) [see page 3] http://books.google.com/books?id=8o9GAQAAIAAJ&lpg=PR45&ots=8yJHYavdO6&dq=Ogni%20legittimo%2C%20buon%20astigiano&pg=PA3#v=onepage&q=Ogni%20legittimo,%20buon%20astigiano&f=false
Дайте Нефть Из Баку Sarah: only one word missing, it's not "of" but...
I advice you all to stjälcuri from Sarah, so we can be spared another Danish round.
Note: a fiasco is a somewhat outdated and nowadays quite expensive kind of bottle. When at restaurants always ask for a bottle and never ever accept wine from an opened fiasco. It's probably cheap loose wine (or even a mix of two wines) the owner just poured in.
I advice you all to stjälcuri from Sarah, so we can be spared another Danish round.
Note: a fiasco is a somewhat outdated and nowadays quite expensive kind of bottle. When at restaurants always ask for a bottle and never ever accept wine from an opened fiasco. It's probably cheap loose wine (or even a mix of two wines) the owner just poured in.
Sarah Karoline Every lawful, good Astesan comes out of the uterus with a flask in hand.
He starts to drink from the day of birth, *from wine reddening his first swaddling bands.
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Aside from cooking with (the cheapest) wine (available), I'm tea-total, so I know nothing about wine.. hahaha
He starts to drink from the day of birth, *from wine reddening his first swaddling bands.
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Aside from cooking with (the cheapest) wine (available), I'm tea-total, so I know nothing about wine.. hahaha
Jake Kissinger Every lawful, good Astesan comes out of the uterus with a flask in hand.
He starts to drink from the day of his birth, with wine reddening his first bands (or "swaddling bands").
He starts to drink from the day of his birth, with wine reddening his first bands (or "swaddling bands").
Jake Kissinger I've been working on something since I put forth that translation; I'll have it ready ASAP.
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